четверг, 16 мая 2019 г.

Final Opinion Essay (1)

     Today more and more young people consider education at   university level to be useless, whereas the older generation claims that the degree really matters. Who is right? This is the problem that Mariella Frostrup arises in her article ‘ I’ve got a top degree, but I'm stuck washing dishes ’ ( https://www.theguardian.com/lifeandstyle/2018/dec/16/i-have-a-top-degree-but-im-stuck-washing-dishes ) 
     First of all, I do share the young people’s viewpoint, because I often come across the real examples of people, who notwithstanding their high grades at University, can’t manage to find a proper job. To stretch this idea out, I’d like to refer to Mariella’s experience. She was graduated from quite a prestigious University but was unfortunate to get employed as well as hundreds of other educated people. I’m sorry to say, but according to the statistics, one-third of graduated people get drown into unemployment. The employers say that ‘rejected high-educated candidates’ lack practice that is much more precious than theoretical knowledge. But how can a certain student get experience if he studies hard from nine to five trying to stick to all the deadlines, to do piles of homework, to be ready for all the tests? Is it really possible? I guess the answer is obvious. 
      Nevertheless, the older generation is sure that the degree is relevant evidence of one’s education. They say that the degree shows that a graduate has general knowledge of his profession. Moreover, I know some parents who push their children to study, because of their fear of government instability. They are convinced that one day there might appear a law about obligatory high education. That means their children will have to get education anyway, that is why they agitate them to start studying process in time. 
     Anyway, I do not agree with the above-mentioned idea, because children are the future adults, so they are responsible for choosing what they really want. As for the general knowledge reflected in the degree, well, objective opinion of the teachers, who put the marks, does not mean anything connected with real knowledge 

    All in all, both opinions can be shared to a certain extent, but I am convinced that the degree of a top university is not a reflection of real knowledge .Mariella Frostrup as well as the whole young generation hope that universities will be substituted for something more efficient and time -saving ; in order to spend time on experience gaining .

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  1. this is the problem that Mariella Frostrup **arises (WW) in her article
    She **was graduated (WF) from quite a prestigious University

    You wrote "She was graduated from quite a prestigious University but was unfortunate to get employed": according to the context it seems to me that you meant the opposite, that is that she was fortunate. Am I right?

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    1. I'm sorry, you probably didn't understand my quite well. The messege of this story is about a girl who got a degree from a prestigeous university, but in spite of that fact was desparate to find a suitable and prestigeous job, which makes the whole education system seem useless!

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  2. You have chosen an interesting topic for discussion and managed to explain different aspects of the issue quite well. What you should have tried to do better is paragraph your work because you have organised it in 2 paragraphs, while a common pattern of essay organisation is 5 paragraphs. I was sure you know it.

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    1. Oh, yes, thank you for informing me about it.
      I wrote the essay in Word 2010 and the whole structure of essay bodies went wrong when I copied it and inserted in Bloggers. I'll fix this problem!

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  3. Content: 5 it is interesting and relevant
    Organisation: the essay is well-structured but there is no THESIS Statement
    Mechanics: I've pointed out the problems in my comments
    Language: your language is rather-well developed and for the most part you have used it correctly. To improve I'd advise you to study more sophisticated vocabulary.

    Content: 5
    Organisation: 4.5
    Mechanics: 5
    Language: 4.5

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Final Opinion Essay (1)

     Today more and more young people consider education at   u niversity level to be useless, whereas the older generation claims that th...